Tim should be holding a rose made of grass. This is the small mistake that i have made.
Other than that, i also wanted to apologize about the use of character Jewel and Blu from the movie Rio because our characters design have not been decided so i decide to use Jewel and Blu as our references for bird. We will change the Jewel and Blu to our character after our characters have been approved.
you have a few things happening close to the edge of the frame and some St. John the Baptist beheaded syndrome shot.
ReplyDeleteOne thing... make sure the part where he is thorn between going to the rescue and not going is more dynamic and dramatic. You can intensify the n. of shots, get closer and closer to the character with each cut (not zoom, cut in and you are closer) and make it feel like when you watch a tennis game, it goes back and forth. Also the moment he takes the important decision you can zoom in all the way to his eyes.
In the end maybe he is hiding or covering himself with his wings and she has to remove the wings away to see him in the face and he is still very reluctant.
She could smile and show no fear. \
I don't think you need a rose or anything.
Also I think kissing is a bit too much, your ending could work much better if it felt as if it were a new beginning :D